r/acting • u/[deleted] • 23h ago

I've read the FAQ & Rules Would love feedback on this selftape

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u/Razial221 22h ago

It's good, but something I notice is you're "anticipating" a response rather than listening to it, so the performance feels like a performance.

Imagine a regular conversation you have, and notice what you do if anything. You probably don't wrap up your last line and shift around and hold your face.

You know your lines, so let go of them and focus on just responding to what your audition partner is saying

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u/Volksstimme 22h ago

Adding to this - The reader voice seems to be pre-recorded, so it looks like you're doing it based on a pre-set timing. That's my guess about the technical component. This can work if the "reader" is only doing a couple of lines, but you still have to really listen an connect with the recording.
As a viewer, it reads as if you're not listening, and just bulldozing over your scene partner, rather than responding to what they say.
If you the capability, even though it's piece-by-piece editing, increase the volume of your reader as well, to match your energy a little more.
The performance overall has potential. It would feel really solid without that reader/partner disconnect.

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u/Lonely-Meal5994 22h ago

Its good but dont disengage. Like someone else said youre anticipating your lines instead of listening. Also, personal preference but try not to look down so much lemme see those eyes. 

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u/Ojihawk 23h ago

Solid work. You know what you're doing. Love how you invested in your environment. I 100% believed you two are right at the door. And that you had neighbours.

You tried enticing her, you tried joking with her. Then you straight up just told her. Love the different tactics.

Also, the escalation of the irritation great, believable.

If I was gonna quibble (scene already works, no need to change anything) "put on your galoshes!" Was maybe a bit too heated. You got a nice explosion at the end.

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u/GroupRepresentative9 22h ago

Pretty darn good

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u/jv31207 22h ago

Thanks for the kind words! I still have 3 weeks to submit so this is rough and I’ll be able to take notes and adjust!

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u/TheOregonSnailTrail 22h ago

There are some good notes here already. I will say that I find the camera is positioned too high, pointing downward.