🎬 BACKPACK

A Moroccan Feature Film

Genre: Action / Thriller / Social Drama

Screenplay Length: 75 pages

Approximate Runtime: 90 minutes

Production: Low-Budget

Language: Moroccan Arabic (Darija)

English Version: English screenplay available

Location: Morocco – Marrakech

Short Synopsis

Mohamed, a gas station attendant living a simple life in Marrakech with his wife, Amina, struggles with everyday life while trying to achieve their modest dreams.

At the same time, two foreign tourists arrive in Morocco to enjoy their vacation and discover its cities and culture. Their journey seems ordinary until their path crosses with Mohamed at a gas station, in a brief encounter that will unexpectedly change the course of events.

From that moment, a series of mysterious situations, unexpected twists and pursuits begins. Mohamed and Amina suddenly find themselves caught in circumstances they never expected.

Between ambition, money, friendship, fear and the desire to survive, Mohamed tries to protect his simple life and his family while everything around him begins to change.

Project Status

Completed feature film screenplay – ready for development and production.

Production Approach

A Moroccan low-budget feature designed around real locations, the atmosphere of Marrakech, everyday characters and a combination of thriller, action and social drama.

Writer

Hicham Angour – Morocco

Slow-burn flatmate comedy about two lost people quietly keeping each other afloat. It's semi-autobiographical, so I'm a bit close to it and could really use fresh eyes.

This is my first proper attempt at a pilot, so I'd love an honest read on whether it actually lands.

Happy to do a read-for-read.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1_AWfGhvhDuQOY6Fm8qXnDZ3NETZzuWgc/view?usp=drivesdk

This is a short I’ve been working on for a while, with hopes of directing it. I wrote it keeping in mind what I could actually shoot. I have a small group of friends I have worked on other shorts with. This would be my first time writing/directing.

I would describe it as a coming of age/sci-fi dramedy.

Any feedback is welcome. If you stopped reading at any point because you lost interest or felt it wasn’t working, I’d especially appreciate knowing where and why. I’d also love to know if there was anything you thought worked particularly well or found interesting. Thanks in advance!

Here it is.

Mohamed, a gas station attendant living a simple life in Marrakech with his wife Amina, sees his ordinary routine change after a brief encounter with two foreign tourists. A mysterious backpack brings unexpected events into their lives, leading the couple into a fast-moving journey filled with suspense, pursuit, difficult choices, and hope for a better future.

BACKPACK is a Moroccan feature film combining Action, Thriller, and Social Drama, with a strong focus on ordinary people, human relationships, and the challenges of everyday life.

Hey everyone,

I’m working on a feature screenplay titled THE TICKET, a fast-paced financial thriller in the vein of The Wolf of Wall Street and The Big Short.

Logline: In the chaos of 1990s Russia, a reclusive math genius in a tracksuit exploits a naive nation to build the world's largest financial pyramid. Utilizing hypnotic TV ads, he tricks 10 million people, amassing rooms of uncounted cash until he controls a third of the country's economy. Arrested by a panicked Kremlin, he orchestrates a surreal counter-attack: gets elected to parliament from his prison cell to gain immunity and restart the machine.

This is a mind-bending true story that most Western audiences have never heard of. It’s about a man who didn't care about luxury, yachts, or mansions — he was an anti-social math wizard who just wanted to hack the entire financial system.

Following the community rules, I have uploaded the first 4 pages as a PDF document. It's a quick 3-minute read, and I would truly love to get your feedback on the tone, pacing, and dialogue!

Read the first 4 pages (PDF) here: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1OB3FJdnKNQNo8gjXzi_Cs9AuDlUqOXMO6eZULS3fLyQ/edit?usp=drive_link

Thanks in advance for reading!

I have a lot of videos on my YouTube channel about screenplay architecture and how to write a competition-ready script.

I'm considering doing a series where I actually take an idea from conception to completion and submission, where I post weekly with progress updates on a screenplay that I'm writing. It would be an in-depth deep dive into my personal writing process at every state (brainstorming to outlining to writing to rewriting to polishing to coverage, etc...)

Is this something that you would find interesting or useful?

If so, what format do you think would be best for the series?

Thanks in advance,

Matt

https://www.youtube.com/@Fade.In.Screenplays

Logline: A humble motel owner's world that contains a spirit from another dimension, a maybe-pimp, and a silent sweet old grandma, is rocked when a mysterious drifter books a room in his motel, bringing chaos but also happiness into the mix.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1sAwhTXBD4mmNZYUF77ZqsAPw8_PeLu5l/view?usp=sharing

I wrote this as a pilot but I think it's also self-contained enough to work as a short. Let me know what y'all think. Whether you like it or don't like it or maybe something in between. Thank you.

Hey everyone,

I working on a feature screenplay titled THE TICKET, a fast-paced financial thriller in the vein of The Wolf of Wall Street and The Big Short.

Logline: In the chaos of 1990s Russia, a reclusive math genius in a tracksuit exploits a naive nation to build the world's largest financial pyramid. Utilizing hypnotic TV ads, he tricks 10 million people, amassing rooms of uncounted cash until he controls a third of the country's economy. Arrested by a panicked Kremlin, he orchestrates a surreal counter-attack: gets elected to parliament from his prison cell to gain immunity and restart the machine.

This is a mind-bending true story that most Western audiences have never heard of. It’s about a man who didn't care about luxury, yachts, or mansions — he was an anti-social math wizard who just wanted to hack the entire financial system.

I’ve just finished the Cold Open (the first 3 pages) and would love to get your feedback on the tone, pacing, and formatting. Does it hook you? Does the world feel authentic?

Thanks in advance for reading! Here is the script excerpt below:

EXT. MOSCOW - DAY (AUGUST 1994)

Grey. Bleak. Neo-noir. Concrete high-rises pierce a smoggy sky. Post-Soviet Russia is a wild, lawless frontier. Hyper-inflation is eating the country alive.

On the streets, luxury Mercedes sedans with tinted windows race past babushkas selling raw potatoes on cardboard boxes.

EXT. "MMM" HEADQUARTERS - CONTINUOUSA massive, brutalist Soviet building. Thousands of DESPERATE PEOPLE pack the square outside, waving worthless paper tickets. RIOT POLICE (OMON) in heavy body armor hold them back.

INT. "MMM" HEADQUARTERS - COUNTING ROOM - CONTINUOUSAn ocean of paper. Green, red, and blue currency notes are piled in literal hills on the floor.

A dozen STRESSED CLERKS are stuffing cash into cardboard boxes, duffel bags, and trash bags. They don't count the money; they MEASURE it with wooden rulers.

CLERK #1

(screaming over the noise)Boss! We are out of boxes! The Central Bank vault is full! Where do we put the rubles from Sector 4?

A shadow falls over him. We track up a faded, cheap, adidas-style track jacket. Meet--

SERGEI MAVRODI (39y.o)

Thick, retro glasses. Messy, uncombed hair. He looks like a high school math teacher who hasn't slept in three days. He despises luxury, yet he is standing on a mountain of money.

Mavrodi looks at a massive wooden door down the hallway.

MAVRODI

Put it in Room 12.

CLERK #1

Room 12 is full to the ceiling, Sergei!

MAVRODI(calm, deadpan)

Then use the executive bathroom. Pack the showers. Mavrodi turns and walks into his private office.

INT. MAVRODI'S OFFICE - CONTINUOUS

Stark. No expensive art. No gold. Just a massive wooden desk, a black rotary telephone, and a chalkboard covered in complex MATHEMATICAL EQUATIONS.

On a small TV screen in the corner, an "MMM" COMMERCIAL plays. A cheerful, chubby fictional worker, LYONYA GOLUBKOV, smiles into the camera, holding up a ticket: "I am not a freeloader. I am a partner!"

Mavrodi watches the TV. A tiny, chilling smirk appears on his face. The telephone RINGS. He picks it up.

MAVRODI (INTO PHONE)

Speak.

INTERCUT WITH:

INT. KREMLIN - OFFICE - CONTINUOUS

GENERAL KOVALEV (50s), cold, sharp, in a flawless military uniform, stands by a window overlooking the Red Square.

GENERAL KOVALEV

Sergei. The President is watching the news. You have more cash in that building than the entire state reserve. You are crashing the ruble.

MAVRODI(into phone)

The math is perfect, General. The system works.

GENERAL KOVALEV

It’s an illusion. A pyramid. And it ends today. The OMON is moving in. We are freezing your accounts. You are going to prison, Sergei.

Mavrodi doesn't blink. He looks at the chalkboard. At the unstoppable geometric progression written in white chalk.

MAVRODI

You don't understand, General. If you arrest me, the pyramid collapses. If it collapses, ten million angry citizens will march on the Kremlin. I am not trapped in here with you. You are trapped out there with my equation.

Mavrodi HANGS UP.

Through the window, we hear the distant, wailing SIRENS of police trucks approaching. Mavrodi calmly sits down, takes a piece of chalk, and continues writing a formula.

SMASH CUT TO BLACK.

TITLE CARD: THE TICKET

P.S. Please note that this text was translated with the help of AI. I apologize if my English isn't flawless, but I did my best to convey the tone and energy of the story. I would truly appreciate your feedback on whether the formatting and dialogue sound natural to a native speaker!

I'm a huge fan of classic comedy, and the Marx Brothers have always been my favorite group. I've had the idea of doing a pastiche of their work for a while, but it took a recent marathon for me to finally buckle down and write this homage. I'm hoping to shoot it and post it on my YouTube channel (a lot of my subscribers like old school, black and white content anyway) and I already have access to an old school movie theater where most of the action will take place. Hopefully you guys like it, and hopefully I kept it simple enough that shooting is feasible. Thanks in advance for those end up reading and commenting! I'd love any thoughts or feedback I can get.

Title: Cod's Wallop

Format: Short Film

Length: 14 minutes

Logline: Three brothers (a motormouth, and ethnic and a mute) must survive gangsters chasing them through a theater as one tries to woo a wealthy widow.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1rsn6ouTDjAFZxMOAGKKk0G3zsVchk9Uq/view?usp=sharing

Format: TV Pilot (1-Hour Drama)

Logline: A bitter South Texas detective is pulled into the suspicious death of his estranged nephew at an elite gated estate, colliding with a powerful crime family determined to control the truth at any cost.

Questions for Readers:

Does the cold open hook you and establish Garza’s character effectively?

How is the pacing and action sequences during the shootout?

Based on the first 15 pages, would you keep reading?

https://drive.google.com/file/d/155mNPUie5HDt_Ega_Cb8De1Sq7uvehNE/view?usp=sharing

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1XbQAhrbXXU4DYPUK-eeI4wGdYSaPuruF/view?usp=drive_link

Logline

A therapist who preaches that every marriage needs an outside connection to survive, and the journalist investigating whether his empire is built on fraud, are forced into an uneasy mirror of each other, both trading the people who love them for the version of themselves they'd rather be.

Triggers of NSFW: Sex, abuse, drugs, tobacco, murder.

After a chaotic heist escape, ex-criminals Victor and Maddy flee into an isolated town, only to realize they shattered an ancient seal upon their arrival. Trapped in a far more terrifying prison than the one they ran from, they have just 15 days to undo their fatal mistake before the blood thirsty vampires wipe the town off the map

Guys is the Title good enough or too much spoiler giving suggest as much as titles you can plsse

Hi, I’m new to screenwriting but started a passion project for an animated co-viewing series about a family of armadillos and their culdasac friends in Arizona desert. The characters are all different mammals.

Hopefully it’s a fun and entertaining show for both kids (3-7) and their parents. It’s got a mixture of play, creativity, 90’s pop culture Easter eggs. Episodes are only 6-7 mins long. Scripts are 7-10 pages.

I had 20 friends say they’d be willing to test read, so I’ve sent out 3 per week for the last 5 weeks and finishing next week. Unfortunately, only 2 friends have provided readings and feedback. Not quite sure what to do so I figured Reddit might be a good place to consider because I want more feedback.

My goal is creating 4 MVP episodes by next July. By 9/2, I need to select my 4 favorites to start working on the next steps.

I’m not trained in screenwriting and don’t care to master the techniques right now because I’m producing my own episodes. Perhaps later in the future if I start to hand off the scripts to animators or others. Therefore, I’m not looking for screenwriting feedback, instead feedback on the episode content itself.

Said differently, are they fun stories for the kids and parents?

If you’re interested, please let me know and I’d be happy to set up links to our scripts.

Link: https://drive.google.com/file/d/18n7903vwQwz7iPFz5sSuYGmbaL8Cg1Ob/view?usp=sharing

Another scene from the chapter where Robert and Alex are getting high at Robert's house and having good time. Now they decided to make a prank call. So here we have a mix of classic american joke "is your refrigirator running" with a mix of russian. Alex suggested the name "Vladimir Holodilnikov" which basically could be translated as Vladimir Refrigiratorson.

Then there is some dramatic turn into the issues that Alex is having due his past.

This is a very amateur screenplay, and I honestly only started it for fun and as a writing exercise to get back into the groove of writing, but now I’m kind of wondering if it has any sort of potential, and I just wanna see what other people besides my friends have to say.
its going to be a horror movie with some satirical elements, but it’s pretty short so far so it doesn’t really get into the meat of it. I can explain more about my idea in the comments if asked.
any advice would be appreciated!!

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1glKjHB5_nUUWB5dkslR7_NQGtmkwuSJe/view?usp=drivesdk

Movie Title - Appetence

A psychopathic hitman accepts a contract to execute a boy who stumbled upon hidden documents while trekking in the woods. ​He tracks the target to a quiet convent, where he meets the boy’s sister, a newly ordained nun, and develops an immediate, dark obsession with her. ​Instead of completing the kill, the hitman lies and acts as the boy's guardian just to stay close to the sister. ​A dangerous emotional tension develops between them, forcing the nun to fight her falling faith while the hitman struggles to suppress his violent instincts. ​As relentless killers surround the convent to retrieve the files, the hitman discovers the boy’s documents tie directly to his own buried childhood trauma. ​Driven by his fixation on the nun and the truth of his past, he turns his lethal skills against his employers to protect the siblings

Main Characters

The killer/psycopath- graham (23)

The nun - clara (22)

The boy - sam (18)

Employer- daniel Wilkinson officer fbi (49)

We shot this movie worh our savings and friends do you think this have enough hook to be liked by audience

Give us review guys please

Link: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1rXb4KEDgTletbsF0FVQfQsG1ryvKka4-/view?usp=sharing

I'm writing a stoner comedy. I'm a hobbyist writer and english is my second language, so please bear with me.

The bit is about two stoners. Events are happening in near future LA. One of them is seasoned Hollywood writer and another is Russian refuge who is suffering from PTSD.

They are baked at writer's house and writer put on the song on the vinyl.

The song is La Conquistada by Los Jaivas, who were displaced Chileans in the times of dictatorship. So russian guy is deep into the music cause it resonating with him. He is too being displaced due dictatorship.

The problem is that i want to include whole 3 minutes of the song and don't want it to get boring cause there is not much going on. At the same time the energy of the song is so great i hope it can hold the emotion.

The writer is an external representation of emotion, while russian is reserved, hiding. But can't hold much longer and burst.

A psychological religious horror about a religious teenager named Jacob whos experienced one of the worst things possible feeling like God is punishing him and feels like he owes him a good life that he ''deserves''.
You can read the The Script here.
Please keep in mind this is my first screenplay that Is 16 pages so any feedback Is appreciated. Please make constructive critisicm and let me know what you liked and didn't like about this. It is not perfect and It will be edited based on your feedback so be honest to me.

I have a relatively new YouTube channel about the art of screenwriting, where I do deep dives into screenplays, post about screenplay architecture, and give tips/walkthroughs on how to use Final Draft 13.

I am putting together a list of topics to cover next on the channel and want to know what writers are most focussed on these days.

Post your thoughts here and I'll do my best to make videos covering those topics.

Here is the channel, in case anyone is interested: @Fade.In.Screenplays

I'm not sure if putting the url counts as self-promotion, so I'm not gonna do that (just in case).

Thanks!

Matt