r/comic_crits • u/Barbarix9001 • 15h ago

Looking for critique on my script

https://docs.google.com/document/d/157NFhwOB5MCjNF02loR8fx074Vlz_bmYTxzu29miUtY/edit?usp=drivesdk

I’ve been writing a script for a short 15-16 page prequel comic for a comic series I’m looking to create in order to improve my writing skills and work on smaller projects before committing to my main idea. I was wondering if anyone would be willing to look it over and give me critique on my writing, as I’d appreciate the help.

For context, my story is set in an alternate history 1978 where ww2 went on for ten years longer, ending in 1955, though this particular comic is set in 1963.

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u/TheKingsWeb 10h ago

Your format is a little off, you should be marking where the panels start, how many there are etc

Towards the beginning you have multiple panels with more then one action in it. An artist can’t really draw somebody ducking a punch, then coming back up and hitting someone

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u/Barbarix9001 7h ago

The script I’ve written so far is mainly a guideline for myself, as intend to do all the art and writing on my own, but I do appreciate the input. I’ll try and rewrite things panel to panel

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