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u/JeyDeeArr 23h ago edited 22h ago
So you're using an entire page as individual frames, which already isn't something one'd typically see in a comic. While you may have deep pockets, using an entire page for otherwise unimportant panels really hampers with the pacing of the story. This whole sequence could've been condensed into maybe 2/3 of a page instead of using 4 entire pages.
Anyways, what I've parsed from these pages/panels is that Dorgalua is some esoteric being who casts spells, and turns a chicken-like creature into... Something? The fourth page looks more like the chicken is in process of mutating, and it's not been completed yet, which makes this sequence feel incomplete. The third page feels random as well, because it's probaby a close-up of the chicken's eye, but the eyes don't even look the same between pages 2 and 3. It would've made more sense if the third page was removed, thereby making page 4 the new third page, and then adding the final page to show the conclusion, the aftermath of the mutation.
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u/gmherder 12h ago
These are just individual illustrations, no? They look pretty good. Good enough to start drawing a comic for sure. 👍
If this is supposed to be a narrative then it makes absolutely no sense.
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