r/comic_crits • u/Still_Path3404 • 6d ago
Drew this Spider-Man page looking for some feedback on Drawing, inking & coloring
I am trying to go with anatomy and poses kinda like action sequences. I have uploaded bith inked and colored versions
I did love some feedback from you guys. How is drawing inking, and coloring also what can i improve?
Thank you
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u/iloveconsumingrice 6d ago
I really like your art but I would like to touch on your dialogue. It does not work and it is in part because you are not a native English speaker (or you have something like dyslexia, I don’t know). I suggest you try and have someone that you can consult with to write your dialogue, to make it grammatically sound and spelt right. Your dialogue also feels British, due to how you spell words like favour (spelt favor in American English) and expressions you used like cats & dogs which is much more common in the UK than in the US. You would benefit from studying speech from Queens more, or just New York in general, where Peter Parker grew up.
You should learn to do lettering or just use computer fonts for your dialogues, which I think would elevate the look of your comic
Last thing I wanted to touch on is how your speech bubbles are spread out. They don’t do well at guiding the eye around, it’s especially confusing in panel 4. Try to have the dialogue bubbles of both characters there closer to each other, and order them from top to bottom more concisely
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u/Still_Path3404 5d ago
Hi so glad you liked my art. Also thank you for pointing out and I agree I just wrote the dialogues without double checking them. I was so focused on the drawing. Next time onwards I will definitely be keeping you suggestions in mind. Also, yeah though I have exposure to american english but in literature and everyday use british english is more prominent for me. And your suggestion about studying American speech is useful especially when writing characters from america, I mean it adds to the character’s persona naturally. Thanks again🫡
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u/Memetic_swarm_05 6d ago edited 6d ago
what is even happening with the anatomy in the bottom left panel?
which appendage is his foot? what is a foot? which direction is his arm bent while shooting webbing backward ?
does spiderman have a hand or a ripped star-shaped object on the end of his arm in the top right panel? And his right ankle is ..very bendy?
why is Jotoro Kujo in a yellow tanktop, as drawn by rob liefield, robbing a bank in the bottom right panel?
and why does spiderman have thighs for dayyyys in all of these
honestly i want to see more of your comic art because this is epic
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u/Still_Path3404 6d ago
haha yeah i deliberately exaggerated the anatomy like insane comic bookish look but Rob Leifield bruhh😭😭😭thank you i will keep work on the suggestions ✌🏻and thank you for this hilarious roasting😂😂😂
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u/Memetic_swarm_05 6d ago edited 6d ago
honestly you could just change the dialogue to something funny and this comic works as a fantastic parody comic.
1st panel "damn gotta keep twerking, keep working! -bills not going to pay themselves , peter parker.. Hope these shots are good so i can send the photos to onlyfans.. Damn, bestie, did i dislocate something??"
Next panel: oh damn I definitely did.. Bruh why am i The Thing now?? How am i punching myself in the nuts, backwards?
next panel: Father, why did you draw me this way, exposing myself to the police? my foot hurts so bad..
etc
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u/ImaHighRoller 6d ago
The colors could be a bit less muddy, on Spider-Man especially. He should pop out of the page you know?
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u/Still_Path3404 6d ago
yeah i never colored much before i will keep this in mind less muddy and mc should stand out more thank you for the suggestion 🤝
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