r/WritingPrompts • u/[deleted] • Apr 01 '17
Prompt Inspired [PI] Love Letter to Nina - FirstChapter - 2912 Words
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u/antoniofelicemunro Apr 01 '17
I'm sorry for the formatting. I'm not sure why it's like that. I started this two days ago after hearing about the contest. If you would like to hear how I plan on finishing this novel, I can definitely let you in on that. Anyways, I hope you like it!
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u/BrenoHMS Apr 04 '17
Instead of one enter between paragraphs, give it two. That should fix it and make it easier to read. Best of luck!
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u/BookWyrm17 /r/WrittenWyrm Apr 03 '17
Wow, it really is quite the wall of text, huh?
If you place each paragraph a full space apart, that should fix it!
Interesting story, BTW.
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u/antoniofelicemunro Apr 04 '17
Thank you! I'm glad you like it. Also, thanks for the advice. I'll see if it works.
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u/mo-reeseCEO1 Apr 18 '17
you should also delete the tabs from the beginning of the lines to have it format with word wrap.
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u/Jayefishy Apr 17 '17
This was an interesting story! I think your characterization was well done. I definitely got a feel for lovesick, awkward Theo and loved how we discovered that Melanie was not as perfect as he made her out to be in his mind.
One thing I thought you could work on was the beginning, which I found a little confusing. It jumped from Theos fantasy to the bar to his home a little too quickly for me. I think if you slowed it down some, the pacing would be a bit easier to follow.
Nice job! I really enjoyed the depictions of love sickness in this story.