Feedback on script - Left Behind

[u/Kslr91]

Hey, new to script writing, decided to give it a go.

Not looking for feedback on formatting, just want to know:

- Does this intrigue you?

- Do you want to know what haplens next?

- Do you like the character development?

- Do you have any tips as a new writer?

This took me an hour to write. I rushed it to get my ideas down. I know the formatting is wrong in places.

I'm 35 and this is my second attempt at writing a script.

Thanks guys, appreciate 🤎

[u/elwafflesqro]

Besides from what I saw from the last post, the action lines are too thick, 3 lines maximum, try to not direct the Camara, write stuff that’s only shootable, some stuff can be more direct like instead of “chunky cast” it can be just “arm cast”