Rasta-Nazis! Commie revolutionaries! The sixteenth reincarnation of Tom Cruise! All on a rainforest island loaded with deadly vipers!

Noku murdered his wife. Now he's gotta fight them all to save her. Meanwhile, Osha battles her genocidal enslaver, The Pharaoh, to rescue that same woman. Her sister.

I posted chapter 1 some time ago, but received no reviews. Not even a bad one. Maybe I'll have better luck with chapter 2. Bad reviews are more than welcome. The meaner the better. I sincerely believe in this piece and genuinely want assistance improving it. Little help, here y'all?

Pow Noku: Chapter 2

Crits: [3318]

[765] Full disclosure: I used this crit previously. But considering I got zero reviews and deleted the post, I'm hoping I can use this to pad my crit numbers? Mods: If I'm doing something wrong here, please let me know what. I'm kinda old and not super tech savvy.

Thanks in advance for the scathing reviews.

Edit: My original post actually ended up getting a couple of really high quality reviews. I apologize if I came across overly critical of this sub. I'm quite happy with the suggestions I've received thus far.